[Serenae] Wonderful Precure! - 21 (1080p).mkv

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Thanks! A few suggestions on top of the current v2 draft: “We'll be fine!” → “You good?” (I think the intonation in this line is rising) “Since you're awake” → consider “Since you're so awake” “What am I??” is fun in the context of her subsequent lines but seems much less plausible than → “What's this?!” as in “What’s going on?”, “How’d you do that?”; or perhaps “So cool!” which strays from the wording but conveys the emotion “I never even realized Kirarin Fox's power could do this!” → “Kirarin Fox's power can do {\i1}this?” (it’s not like she’s had a chance to learn its abilities before now) “Let's play again sometime” works fine but technically sounds like ‘mada’ to me (perhaps you have CCs to check against), in which case → “Let's keep playing” or “Play more with me”

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Thanks as always! I'll make those tweaks for the v2 batch.